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Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) is an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

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It is often said that boarding school is a great environment for children to develop.
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, the issue is not entirely straightforward, and arguments can
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 be made against the idea. The essay will discuss the debate and give a concluding outlook. On the one hand, those who support boarding schools claim that living on campus all term long can form discipline in children which is ruined by various
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 sources. These sources include smartphone addiction, noisy spaces and lack of parents’ control. Meanwhile, others argue that living far from home will help these students improve on their independence and self-confidence, which are essential personal skills in a globalized world. To a certain extent, attending boarding can be a good stepping stone for students who want to study
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beyond or across the sea
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 in the future because its experience partially simulates that of studying abroad.
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, opponents of
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 view point out that the restricted environment would curtail the development of children, especially those in formative years.
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, students who spend all their time at school will not have many social opportunities compared to other students.
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, it seems that the generation gap would be elongated due to less time spent with family while
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 gap is quite large in
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 issue can lead to
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 conflicts among children and their parents in the long-term. Overall, it is suggested that
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the decision
 to let children attend boarding school should be taken into serious consideration based on their own interest and circumstances.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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