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Some of the world’s languages are now spoken very little, so steps should be taken to prevent it completely decline. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

It is true that an increasing number of languages in many parts of the world are becoming less prevalent. The question of whether solutions should be put forward to tackle
this
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 problem or not is of fundamental importance. On the one hand, protectors of dying languages argue that it is of critical importance to do so in light of two reasons
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First
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, each
language
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 is intrinsically interesting and represents the uniqueness of its culture, which can provide invaluable insights into people who speak it.
Therefore
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, the diminution of
such
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 languages is regrettable.
Moreover
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, the decline of a
language
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, one of the major ways in which people identify themselves, must have repercussions on those whom it is their mother tongue.
However
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, I am firmly of the opinion that there is
rationale
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a rationale
 for not striving to save weakened languages.
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 is because it is probably not feasible to engineer
language
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 use for any length of time. Social and cultural changes are inevitable and
language
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 is no exception. It is evident that at various historical periods, certain languages have briefly gained the ascendancy, for economic or political reasons, and others have
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 declined in importance.
Furthermore
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, if it were viable, the
endeavor
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavour
 to protect a
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 from the verge of extinction may not be worthwhile. The attempt to allocate financial and human resources to implement those preservation strategies could be regarded as an expensive luxury, while competency in more popular languages,
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 as English, German and Chinese,
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is
inarguably
in an unarguable and undisputed manner
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 more beneficial and substantially economical. In conclusion, in spite of the main advantages aforementioned, I strongly oppose the interference to halt the death of a
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 as
such
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 act is neither realistic nor desirable.

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