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Some people believe that the expansion of tourism is ruining the culture of a country, but others consider that tourism is the only way of protecting a culture. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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last
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 few decades have witnessed the increasing development of
tourism
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 in many countries. While some people think that the prevalence of
tourism
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 has led to undesirable impacts on the indigenous
culture
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 of a
country
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, I would claim that it is
also
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 an effective way to conserve a
culture
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. On the one hand, there are several reasons why some people think that the expansion of
tourism
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 has affected negatively the native
culture
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 of a nation.
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, an increasing number of tourists to a place could pose a threat of vandalism to the local
culture
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 there. A clear
example could
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example, could
 be seen in The Literature Temple
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in
 Hanoi. Many irresponsible visitors have carved their names and drawn pictures on the wall of
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 a thousand-year-old heritage. Another downside is that
tourism
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 could potentially lead to cultural assimilation. Local people could adopt new cultures and traditions introduced by the influx of foreign tourists to their
country
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.
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, I would argue that
tourism
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 plays an important role in cultural preservation. The major reason is that with the expansion of
tourism
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, the government is likely to invest more financial resources in preserving the indigenous
culture
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. To illustrate, local authorities in Ninh Binh
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have allocated
 a significant amount of budget for the reconstruction and maintenance of many historic buildings of ethnic minorities to attract more domestic and foreign visitors.
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, the
culture
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 and traditions of a
country
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 would be popularized with
tourism
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 development. By
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 way, the local
culture
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 could avoid the risk of disappearance. In conclusion, while the expansion of
tourism
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 has negatively affected indigenous
culture
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 in several aspects, I contend that
tourism
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 could still contribute to cultural protection of a
country
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.
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