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Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age. Some think they should begin at least 7 years old. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is no denying that
education
 for children is a great topic of concern in society. Some people say that children have
to begin
 their formal
education
 as soon as possible while other people believe that they should begin when they become 7 years old.
this
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This
 essay will
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 both attitudes before I present my own opinion. On the one
hand some
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hand, some
 people hold the view that children should begin the study at a very early age.
First
 of all, it is believed that the most parents in over the world they all want their children have a good
education
 so these children are
began
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beginning
 their
education
 early.
therefore it
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Therefore, it
Therefore it
open
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opens
 a host of opportunity for children and
also
 they can learn something new knowledge about society which could make children become
intelligent
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more intelligent
 than in the past.
On the other hand
, other people are of the opinion that children should not begin their formal
education
 until they are seven years old.
To begin
 with, is
this
obviously
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obvious
 that they are still babies and they do not aware what they learn in school.
For example
,
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,
my younger
brother he
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brother, he
 is 6 years old and he
prefer
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prefers
 to learn many things to their parents at home
instead
 of at school.
In addition
, it is undoubted that start to normal
education
 after seven years be more beneficial for children to have a childhood.
in
Suggestion
In
 the other world, they could become more mature and easily into
education environment
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the education environment
education environments
. In conclusion, it can be said that it is a helpful topic for the family who have children.
my
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My
 personal view is that children should begin their formal
education
 after seven years old I think
that is
 a suitable age to absorb knowledge most effectively.
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