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Some exerts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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The children studying at the primary school will start to learn a foreign
language
 easily and effectively than the teenager studying at secondary school. That has been adopted by some educational authorities with both positive and negative aspects Learning other languages can
also
 bring some problems for children at the age of 7 to 10 because they still young to approach
language
 in other countries. In the basic class for pupils, they should explore the science, learn the way to
calculate especially
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calculate, especially
 using their mother tongue fluently before understanding the
second
 languages. It can be easily affected the ability to
communicatetheir
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communicate their
originallanguage
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original language
 in the future.
On the other hand
, the fact that there are a lot of benefits.
First
 of all, the children who are approximately between five and nine years will have ability to get knowledge about
language
 twice as fast as the teenager for both the intonation and vocabulary.
Also
, It is the
age
an instinctive motive
urge
 to develop the brain and explore the world, they can remember many new words quickly
by
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with
 some pictures and imitate the overseas easily despite not knowing how to write them. Obviously
,
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,
Their voice will be improved faster than
studentswho
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students who
 can be difficult to cope up with foreign languages because of the pronunciation habit.
Moreover
, English is one of the most popular international
language
 which over a billion of people using it for communication, so learning English in the childhood is really a good choice to help children get more success in the future. To sum up, the minor disadvantages will never prevent children in primary school from knowing foreign phrases early will be never excessive. Knowing one more
language
 will help them
successful
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successfully
 and expand a new world in the future
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