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Some children receive almost no encouragement from their parents regarding their performance at school, while other children receive too much pressure from their over enthusiastic parents which can have a negative impact on the child. Why do you think some parents put too much pressure on their children to perform well at school? What do you think the role of a parent should be in their child’s education?

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Nowadays parent pays more attention to their children Education. In order to, let their kids grow up with a good acknowledgment. But, unfortunately, they will be the cause of failure. In
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, a lot of parents thought that if they put their kids under tension they will do well in their education.
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, they are following them in everywhere and controlling. But, they did not know by they way the parents will not get nothing.
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, children need more freedom to learn what they like.
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, parents want their children to achieve whatever they have failed on them live.
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, they are not considering what their kids want to be in them live. For illustration, I remember when I was in my secondary school all my family given me a lot of pressure to be an engineer. Alternatively, they are no one asked me about my dreams and aims I want to be in the future.
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, encouragement is the most important way for children to achieve their goals should the father and mother doing that always without any boring.
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, if you will encourage your son or daughter it means you are going to build his or her character and they will be a good person to have autonomy and can be responsibly handle in his life.
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, parents should give freedom for children without any stress and always encourage them.
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 to, they must guide them, give a lot of support and sharing their experiences with them. In conclusion, being a father or mother does not have any right to destroy your kids’ character or to plan his future.
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, should support, guide, ask him what he wants to be in the future and give him freedom to draw his aims.
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