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Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Having a good daily diet with full nutrition is important to
people
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peoples'
 health.
However
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, it is more commonly said that everyone should turn into vegetarian in order to reduce the amount of
meat
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 consumed. In my opinion, I disagree with
this
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 point of views for several reasons.
First
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,
meat
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 still plays a necessary role in keeping people in
healthy mode
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a healthy mode
healthy modes
. It is scientifically proven that
animals
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animal
 fat is vital for building a strong structure for a number of organs in the body by providing a quantity of chemicals
such
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 as Protein, Calcium, Magnesium, etc.
Furthermore
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, in from some people's perspectives, having
meat
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 as part of the
dishes
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dish
 could bring them the satisfaction when eating. They can feel the chewy and mouth watering tastes of the
meat
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 being cooked by different recipes with flexible
flavors
the general atmosphere of a place or situation and the effect that it has on people
flavours
, which helps them find more joyful in appreciation.
Similarly
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, in several cultures,
meat
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 might be one of the main dishes of the meals which should be
appeared
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appearing
. On the other hands, people should consider vegetables as an important
nutrition
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nutritious
nutritional
 supply. Eaters could absorb the same amount of vital vitamins and minerals as when they eat
meat
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 without feeling guilty for killing animals.
More obviously
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Most obviously
,
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,
some animal activists say that killing the mass of
cattles
domesticated bovine animals as a group regardless of sex or age
cattle
 to provide food source could be more cruel than harvesting the crops.
Moreover
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, scientists recommend that eating more vegetables might lower the rate of health diseases include
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 age-related problems: cardiovascular, heart cancer, etc.
fat
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Fat
 in animals, on the opposite site, may cause these previous unhealthy problems. In conclusion, people should balance the quantity of
meat
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 and
vegetables eating
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vegetables, eating
 in a daily meal so that they could limit the chance of being malnutrition. No one could restrict others to be vegetarian since
that is
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 human rights and freedom in choosing their everyday foods; but dietitians are recommended to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 as much as nutrition that their bodies need in order to be healthy enough.

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