Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that some ex-prisoners are able to return to normal
life
and get accepted by the community. In my opinion, because of that, their talks with students can really help
educating
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educate
to educate
about the consequences of being a criminal.
Firstly
, an ex-offender is a real example of crime-related problems. Their experiences are full of vivid stories, and it can really help when trying to attract the pupils’ attention.
For example
, they can demonstrate their journey of committing the crimes, how harsh the prison
life
is and how difficult it is to rejoin the society. More importantly, these are all real
life
examples,
hence
being more
persuading
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persuaded
than that of the teachers or parents, who only knew it through books and documentaries.
Secondly
,
this
gives the students
an
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a
once in a lifetime chance to meet and talk with a prisoner.
Life
behind those prison doors is always considered a taboo, and the younger people can only find the information in textbooks and short footage.
This
creates many prejudices about the prison
life
,
such
as the dirty facilities, everyday fights and gang formation. A short conversation with an ex-prisoner can unveil many truths and give
students many
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students, many
interesting facts, which is clearly more interesting than some lifeless words
on
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in
a book. In conclusion, the talks hosted by ex-offenders can be beneficial in terms of preventing the students from involving in a crime
Submitted by Andy on

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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