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Recycling is now an essential measure:it is time for everyone in society to become more responsible towards the environment. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays,
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environmental pollution by
humans’
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 rubbish is a crucial issue for everyone.
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 idea of recycling is becoming more popular day by day as
people
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 need to be more responsible. From my point of view,
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recycling is vital
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 the lack of natural resources in the future and as
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 way of improving environmental conditions.
First
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 thing that citizens could do is to divide everything into
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separate
container
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containers
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 for each kind of
materials
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material
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.
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 containers are usually installed in
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 of flats or outside
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 in places where
people
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 tend to spend their free time, like parks.
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, in
Japan
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people
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 have already used to separate rubbish
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 over 7 different categories as they are provided with special containers for it.
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,
separation
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the separation
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 of everything and not only glass and plastic must become a habit for everyone.
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, not only citizens have a huge role in recycling but
also
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 the
government
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. In theory, strengthening the environmental policy might lead to
promotion
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the promotion
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 of recycling
idea
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ideas
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.
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, the
government
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 is in charge of developing major facilities and the necessary infrastructure
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 the recycling process. To say
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, it may build fabrics that will convert used materials into
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new ones.
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, some
people
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 suggest that the
government
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 may encourage society to recycle by reducing
tax
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taxes
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. In conclusion, even though
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modern society understands
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 necessity of recycling as it will definitely have a good effect on the environment and
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help
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 to save natural resources, there is still a huge amount of work
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that should
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 be done. As
it was
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mentioned in the essay,
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rubbish separation
is needed
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 to become a part of everyday routine and the
government
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 should pay more attention
on
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to
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 improving environmental policy.

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relevant specific examples
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Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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