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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance tech which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many believe that technological advancements have led to a decline in criminal incidents as the culprit can be easily traced. I do agree that
this
 must have played an important role in curbing the menace, but I
also
 think that
this
 would not have been achievable without the enforcement of strict laws and regulations. The
scare
a number or letter indicating quality (especially of a student's performance)
score
 of repercussions would have definitely instilled a sense of fear in delinquent minds, who may think twice or thrice before indulging into criminal activities. Technological advancements coupled with strict protocols and harsh punishments will
further
 deter them from following
this
 path. In a data released by the Supreme Court of India, about 30% of the cases in the 1970s could not be concluded, because of lack of proof, and
hence
 had to be closed.
This
 figure has decreased substantially to only about 12% now.
Such
 considerable drop in percentages reflect the effectiveness of these cutting-edge technologies employed to catch the assailant. With the advancements of technology in the field of Genetics and Forensics, it has become very easy to trace the culprit. A single strand of hair, a drop of blood or a single fingerprint can plead you guilty in the court of law. With the help of
this
, uncountable rapists have been put behind the bar, by taking out semen from the women's body.
Additionally
, mobile phones, which have become a basic amenity have
also
 massively contributed in the investigations. As, with the help of SIM card and EMI number, the suspect's location at a particular time of the day can be found out. All these factors compel the people to abstain from criminal activities, and adopt a peaceful life. In conclusion, I believe there is no doubt
in
Suggestion
on
 the role of the latest gizmos in reducing the number of criminal cases.
Nonetheless
, if paired with strict laws and harsh punishment, we could
further
 bring down the criminal rate.
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