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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal.Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In
ministry
 offices there is generally believed, that improving currency value is the most important aspect, whereas group of people believes, improving currency value should not be the only goal for a
ministry
. I would agree with the statement, the
ministry
 should
also
 focus on other aspects other than improving currency value.
Although
 people believe improving
country
 economy would improve its dignity worldwide, but
this
 not the case there are several other factors one should keep in mind for improving the dignity of the
country
. There are several aspects on which overall development of
country
Suggestion
the country
a country
 depends. These aspects are classified into different category like, medical, real estate, mining, petroleum, education standards, crime rate, etc. If one wants to improve the standard of a
country
 he or she should consider all the categories mentioned above as every category is been linked to each other,
for example
 if an Multi National Company (MNC) wants to open up an office in a counrty, than that MNC would be intersed in knowing the standards of the medical facilities offered by that county, education standards, criminal rates and the list goes on and on. So that there employees are safe and qualified. The list of standards given by the United Nation (UN) state clearly, that status of
country
Suggestion
a country
 does not only depend on the economic strength of that
country
. The UN has introduced several factors in deciding the status of a
country
. For instants, has there been an improvement in the health facilities of that
country
, is there a decline in death rate, has education improved over the years. These factors are taken into account to decide the dignity or rank of
country
Suggestion
the country
.
Therefore
 the
ministry
 should focus on all the aspects and should give them equal importance.
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  • social equality
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  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
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  • healthcare system
  • education system
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  • policy decisions
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