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The bar chart gives information about the differences of
oil
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 production Capacity in six countries (Iran, Iraq, Kuwait, Qatar, Saudi Arabia and UAE) in four years (1990, 2000, 2005 and 2020). It is estimated by millions of Barrels per
day
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. Overall, the volume of
oil
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 production went up in all periods of
time
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 in six countries. Saudi Arabia was the most outstanding country about
oil
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 production capacity, while
the smallest
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the small
amount
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 of
oil
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product
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produced
 belonged to Qatar. In terms of Saudi Arabia, in 1990,
this
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 country produced around 8,5
million
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 of barrels of
oil
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product
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production
produced
.
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 In 2000, it got 9
million
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 approximately. The volume of
oil
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 experienced the significant increases in 2005 and 2010 (about 13% and 15 % respectively).
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, Qatar had the lowest
amount
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 of
oil
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product
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produced
, it was under 1
million
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 of barrels per
day
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 all periods of
time
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. Looking at the
amount
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 of
oil
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 in
Iran which
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Iran, which
 got about 3 millions of Barrels per
day
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. It witnessed the slight increases about 4
million
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 in 2000, exactly 4
million
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 in 2005, approximately 5 millions of barrels per
day
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 in 2010. In Iraq, the volume produced
oil
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 about 2
million
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 in 1990. In 3 three
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 periods of
time
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, the
amount
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 of
oil
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product
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 rose above 2 millions of barrels per
day
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. Both of Kuwait and UAE had the minimal growth of
oil
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product
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produced
 around 2 and nearly 4 millions of barrels per year in the period of
time
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diligence
  • consistent effort
  • inherent talent
  • honing skills
  • external factors
  • upbringing
  • social connections
  • economic background
  • right place at the right time
  • contributing factor
  • conjunction
  • success
  • achievements
  • endeavors
  • fortune
  • serendipity
  • determinants
  • efficacy
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