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Some People think that modern invention have more problems as compared to their benefits. Do you agree or disagree.?

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Implementation of modern technology has served as the boon, To the economic growth of the country.
Although
, it is argued by some individuals regarding implications caused by it.In my opine, modern inventions have more benefits which overshadow its problem.
This
 essay will discuss benefits of new inventions followed by reasoned conclusion.
Firstly
, the creation of smartphones was meant with the aim of faster communication between the people sitting far aside, but today's youth are using phone for different purposes
such
 as gaming and overuse of social media results in weakness of the eyes.
Moreover
, some miscreants
instead
 of using social media for fruitful outcomes, they are misusing them, resulting in credit card scams
,
Accept space
,
hacking issues.
Secondly
, cars were invented with aim to travel longer distances in a shorter time period, but today's generation are using motor vehicles even travel shorter distances.
Hence
, pollution has increased to a tremendous level.
For example
, rate of pollution in Delhi is so high that the chief minister has to implement odd, even policy in the state to control the level of it.
Hence
 it can be said that inventions are meant for the ease of human life and to give facilities and convenience to people, but humans are the ones who are not using it properly and
as a result
 of which they cannot make best out of it.
Moreover
, the invention of the calculator was to calculate complex problems, but today's juvenile use calculators even to calculate simple problems
as a result
, they are not able to do brainstorming in their formatting years and facing trouble in their developing stage.
Finally
, New technology has definitely given comfort to human beings, but misuse of technology must be avoided in order to make best use out of it.
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