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some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. others argue that it is best to try and improve such situations. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 of people believe that it is good to accept a bad
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 rather growing old on it, whereas another
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 of people believe just the opposite, they believe
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 should try and improve their
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. In the following passage we would discuss both views mentioned above. Those who believe,
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 should accept a bad
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 as, no job security or lesser paid jobs are people who do not wish to do something big or innovative as they do not want to take risks in their life because they are satisfied with the lifestyle they posses. Even if they get an opportunity to improve their lifestyle or living standard they would let it go because it requires a lot of attention and dedication, whereas another
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 of people would accept
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 opportunity of improving their living standards. The other
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 of people who believe in improving their
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 are the
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's who are ready to get out of their comfort zone and think out of the box for improving their living standards as they have scene of believe in themsleves there are many examples of
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 kind of people like famous cricketer MS Dhoni, his dad didn't wanted him to have future in cricket but MS Dhoni had a believe that he could improve his living standrads by playing cricket he risked all he had just on his believe.
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 should take risks in his or her life, there are chances your discussion could be wrong, but
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 should still make the discussion because without making
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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