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Some people think the cheap air flight gives ordinary people more freedom. However, others think the cheap air flight should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many other problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Transportation has been increased over the period of time and
moreover
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, airline is the fastest mode of transport which people can
travel
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 across the country in very less time. Some people believe that ordinary flights provide more access to low class people while others argue that these flights produce a lot of emission which pollute the quality of air. In the following essay, I intend to describe both the views and provide my prospective.
To begin
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 with, with the invention of the flights, people do not have barriers to
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 across the country. It has made long travels so convenient that we can reach the destination without hassle and short period of time.
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, because the
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 charges have reduced due to the enormous companies, even under privileged families could offer to the
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travel
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. Definitely it will be a good sign to encourage low cost flights so that everyone would be able access to it and it boost the economy of the country and
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 helps poor people to fulfil their wish.
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, there are a couple of issues if more cheap flights as opposed to expensive flights. As they are very affordable, people
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 more regardless of need and it increases the air traffic.
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, it pollutes the air quality which in turn effect more health issue to common people. A recent survey published that domestic
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travel
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 is increased by 80 percentage as opposed to 40 percentage in
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last decade
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the last decade
. To Put it in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that,
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 tickets are cheap, it's an individual responsibility to
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 when it is really needed,
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 way we can diminish the emission and alleviate the health issues.
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