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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is argued are some
benefits
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 if someone can speak other
languages
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 you will be easiest to
travel
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 around the world and have the opportunity to get a job, but some people do not agree with those statements and think there are other
benefits
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besides
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 that.
This
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 essay will examine both of the statements about the positive impact if you can speak other
languages
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.
To begin
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 with, language is the best way to communicate with other people, especially if we want to
travel
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 and work in other lands. When people begin to learn other
languages
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, it means you must learn about their culture.
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, I want to
travel
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 to South Korea I learn the Korean language through Drama and song. After that, I directly learned about their habit and culture. Because of that, the fastest way for me to be able to speak their language and get the
benefits
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 is to vocational industry and
labor
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 there.
Besides
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 that, there are huge advantages to schooling if we can speak other
languages
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.
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, the government of Germany gives free access to school for students outside Europe if they are able to speak German and give scholarship from the ministry.
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, it has a big positive impact on academics who are interested can speaking other
languages
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.
To sum up
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, there are a lot of
benefits
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 that will appear if we can speak and sound like native speakers. I believe all of the different reasons
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 as
travel
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, work, and learning other habits and cultures, getting a scholarship can have a positive impact.

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coherence cohesion
Make sure your essay has a clear logical structure, with each paragraph focusing on a single main idea. Use topic sentences effectively to introduce the main point of each paragraph, and ensure that subsequent sentences provide supporting details to develop that point.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your introduction clearly presents the essay topic and your own opinion. At the end, offer a well-rounded conclusion that summarizes the main points of the essay and restates your opinion in light of the discussion.
task achievement
Develop your main points with clear, detailed examples. Use relevant, specific examples that effectively support the point being made, and remember to explain how these examples relate to the topic.
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Aim for a complete response by fully addressing all parts of the task. Make sure you discuss both views presented in the topic and clearly state your own opinion. Each viewpoint should be explored thoroughly to achieve a balanced argument.
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Present your ideas clearly and comprehensively. Ensure that your argument is easy to follow and that your writing progresses logically from one point to the next. If an idea is complex, break it down into parts and explain each one as necessary.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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