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One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no doubt that children 's conduct is a valuable characteristic. There are some people think that parents need to
teach conduct
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teach, conduct
 to their
childern
a young person of either sex
children
, others think that it is the responsibility of the teachers. I strongly consider a joint effort of both the groups have the crucial role in setting the younger generation' s
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. On the one hand, people who think that parents can teach their the off-spring how to behave in an accepted manner in the society.
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 is because they know why their children behave in a particular way in a specific situation. Since, they are both mentally and emotionally well connected, any minute change can be easily noticed;
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; it is possible to control the immature or unnatural behaviour of the child.
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, opponents of
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 view point argue that teachers, who specialised and qualified to hand the misconducted and disobedient students.
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, as they have been trained to discipline these ones,
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 is a
frutful
productive or conducive to producing in abundance
fruitful
frightful
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act
 to shape the future generation.
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, training them to manage their time accurately, complete the task at the right time, and respecting the seniors are the some of the manners can be taught by teaching faculties.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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