Children can learn effectively by watching television. therefore, they should be encouraged to watch television regularly at home and at school. to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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It is believed that
television
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has positively influenced on children's learning skills and some individuals opine that pupils should be forced toward watching
television
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. I think
television
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has negative and positive effects regarding learning new things and I will partially agree with
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statement and explain how it is effective to learn and detrimental sometimes.
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of all, watching
television
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has become habit of youngsters as well as it enhances infants multifarious skills
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as, communication, listening, and reading skills.
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, some
education
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educational
articles have shown that 90% teenagers have adapted
habit
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habits
to watch
television
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who tend to eager to learn several languages to extend their knowledge about other nations by reading some history books which have been written in their mother language. So,
thelevision
broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects
television
insists us to learn various languages.
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, pupils watch some tv shows which provide information about
nature
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nature, such
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as, discovery channels.
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of all, every coin has two sides and
television
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has
also
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some negative sides.
This
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technology has impacted on children's health and social lifestyle.
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, if kids are encouraged to spend more time by watching tv at home or school
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then
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than
spending more time front of the
television
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screen can effect on
infant's eyes
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the infant's eyes
and they lose touch from friends.
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, sometimes they watch inappropriate shows which lead to get bad habits.
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, as all individual know crime has become popular in
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era
a particular geographical region of indefinite boundary (usually serving some special purpose or distinguished by its people or culture or geography)
area
because of
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technology as toddlers follow crime shows and they want to try it in real life and go astray in their life. Coming to an outcome, adults must force children to watch
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television but
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television, but
they should make time limits on it as well as keep checking which tv show they are following.
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, they should ask them some information that what they have learnt by watching
television
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • passive
  • sedentary
  • limit
  • creativity
  • imagination
  • educational content
  • expose
  • different cultures
  • perspectives
  • negative effects
  • behavior
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