Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a west of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
this
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modern era,
wrold
everything that exists anywhere
world
is changing a lot as compared to the past and today people
mostly kills
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will mostly kill
mostly kill
wild animals for their enjoyment. But personally I believe that wild animals are the beautiful creation of the god and we must have to save them. In the following paragraphs, I have some strong arguments to support my view.
However
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, humans are becoming selfish day by day and they think that
this
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world is only for them. Even though, they believe that, there is no space for other species on
this
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planet. But they forget that every coin has two sides "one is positive while another is negative". Because wild animals are the golden part of the nature and even in some points life cycle is
next
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to impossible without them. So it's our humble duty to protest their population. As per the 2017 government report, some
african
a native or inhabitant of Africa
African
countries major income only depends on the non-vegetarian animals. Because they
attracts
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attract
the
tourism
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tourists
.
Moreover
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, taking care of these animals requires huge amount of money and other lots of resources.
For example
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, In
zoo lots
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zoo, lots
of security is necessary to avoid any incident. Even to take care of
animals
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animal
animals'
health every year government spend millions of
dollers
the basic monetary unit in many countries; equal to 100 cents
dollars
. Due to
this
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reason people think that it's
batter
something superior in quality or condition or effect
better
to invest money on development rather than
this
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. One research of
oxford
a university town in northern Mississippi; home of William Faulkner
Oxford
university shows that, still 65 percentage of people are not aware of the importance of other species. To conclude, wild animals are very necessary for
this
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worls
everything that exists anywhere
world
works
. So if government
use
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uses
more time and resources to save
tham
Accept comma addition
them, then
them then
then
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it will be beneficial for the society as well as for the country and I have fully agreed with
this
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.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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