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. Some people believe that having a conversation on a mobile phone in a public or crowded place should be banned. Others feel that we should be able to talk wherever we like. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Communication is really important in our life. It is said by some individuals that they should not talk publicly on a mobile phone
,
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,
 while others think that people should be allowed to talk wherever they want to be. In my perspective, humans should be allowed to talk on
phone but
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the phone, but
the phone but
at
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in
 some places they should not be allowed to communicate with others and both the viewpoints will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs. On the on hand, working class people have less time because when they are working under any
organization
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organization, then
then
 they are not allowed to talk on
phone
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the phone
 so they can talk only when they are in
bus
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a bus
, car which is really a crowded place.
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
 if there is an emergency
then
 people can reach immediately to their loved ones in case of accident or any other
mishappening
.
On the other hand
, people should not talk at
crowded place
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crowded places
 because
sometime
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
 there is possibility that they can get the wrong message which could lead to disastrous consequences. People should not talk in hospitals and cinema halls. To recapitulate, I would like to say that people should not allowed to talk
on
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about
 public places because they have right to talk wherever they are.
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