. Some people believe that having a conversation on a mobile phone in a public or crowded place should be banned. Others feel that we should be able to talk wherever we like. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Communication is really important in our life. It is said by some individuals that they should not talk publicly on a mobile phone

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while others think that people should be allowed to talk wherever they want to be. In my perspective, humans should be allowed to talk on

phone but

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the phone, but

the phone but

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some places they should not be allowed to communicate with others and both the viewpoints will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs. On the on hand, working class people have less time because when they are working under any

organization

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organization, then

then

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they are not allowed to talk on

phone

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the phone

so they can talk only when they are in

bus

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a bus

, car which is really a crowded place.

Secondly

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if there is an emergency

then

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people can reach immediately to their loved ones in case of accident or any other

mishappening

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On the other hand

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, people should not talk at

crowded place

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crowded places

because

sometime

on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always

sometimes

there is possibility that they can get the wrong message which could lead to disastrous consequences. People should not talk in hospitals and cinema halls. To recapitulate, I would like to say that people should not allowed to talk

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about

public places because they have right to talk wherever they are.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

206 words

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