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1. International travel is becoming coming cheaper and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourist do the advantage of increased tourists outweigh disadvantages

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Travelling is the important source of revenue for any country. It is said by some individuals that these
days many
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days, many
 countries
have allowed
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are allowing
 people to visit their nations for different purposes. In my perspective,
this
trend
 has pros as well as cons and my viewpoints on
this
 topic will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs.
To begin
 with, there are various benefits of
this
trend
. When people travel to other
nations
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nations, then
then
 they can explore other countries and they can
also
 get
chance
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a chance
the chance
 to know about the culture of other countries which widen their knowledge.
For instance
, a person named Abraham visited several countries because he wanted to make documentaries on different cultural activities of people and later on his name was recorded in the world record.
On the other hand
,
this
trend
 has
also
 some drawbacks. Sometime those people move to other nations who have
criminal record
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a criminal record
criminal records
 and they hide themselves in new nations and in
this
 way they can harm other countries and become more notorious criminals. Another con is that
this
trend
 has encouraged foreign investment policy in which people of other nations can invest in different countries and
this
trend
 has decreased the chances of sale of the products in other nations. To
recapitulate I
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recapitulate, I
 would like to write that travelling gives opportunities to other people to travel
worldwide
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world wide
. I personally think that
advantages
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the advantages
 of
this
 tend out weighed disadvantages
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