It is better to learn the way people lived in the past through films and video records than written documents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Its

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It's

important for all the individuals to know the history of ancient people

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It is said by some individuals that people can learn about their forefathers from films and

videoes

the visible part of a television transmission

videos

which is very popular in all the countries, while

other

any of various alternatives; some other

another

believes that books

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magazines and journals are more convenient.I partially agree with the aforementioned statements and my viewpoints on

this

topic will be elaborated in the following paragraphs.

To begin

with, films and documentaries and

videoes

the visible part of a television transmission

videos

represents

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represent

the lifestyle of old people in very interesting and creative

way

so it gain the attention of people.

Secondly when

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Secondly, when

people see films

then

there is possibility that people can store information in their mind for

longer time

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a long time

long time

For instance

, a survey was conducted in India and its result was that 50 percent people of Delhi showed their interest in films because they consider movies are the fastest

way

of acquiring knowledge about the living style of ancestors.

On the other hand

, some people have contradictory viewpoints

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They believe that books are the cheapest

way

of learning about old people

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They

also

think that in

schools

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school

teachers can not show films all

days

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day

so the best

way

to teach them is that children can learn through books. To recapitulate., I would like to write that both films and written documents are the essential mean of acquiring knowledge about ancestors. So people should learn through both means.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Grammar mistakes
 

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234 words

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

historical events
visual representation
immerse
bring to life
accuracy
bias
limited scope
perspective
incomplete
superficial
detailed
reliable
primary sources
firsthand accounts
critical analysis
interpretation
balance
comprehensive understanding
critical thinking skills

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