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1. Nowadays online shopping is extremely popular. Discuss the impact of it on the environment and on people who lost their jobs because of it.

#impact #environment #people #jobs
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There is no doubt that online shopping is very popular
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 It is said by some individuals that
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 trend has changed the environment and some of the people lost job opportunities because of
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 topic will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs.
To begin
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Secondly it
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Secondly, it
has given
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gives
 opportunity to many people to choose the
cloths
clothing in general
clothes
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 electronics and cosmetics of their own choice
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For instance
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, in India there are many companies like Amazon
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 Flipcart, which offer all
kind
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kinds
 of products it has made life easy and comfortable for people.
On the other hand
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, it has adversely affected the job opportunities for the people because many people have become unemployed because they
do not
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do, not
 how to operate computers because additional training is required for
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 purpose which is very expensive and everyone
can not
can not
cannot
 afford it
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Furthermore
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, only young people can be hired for selling products online and old people are reluctant to learn new technology so they think that they are unemployed. To recapitulate, I would like to write that online shopping is
new trend
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the new trend
a new trend
 and
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 trend appreciable because it has given young people opportunities to work in
new environment but
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the new environment, but
the new environment but
a new environment but
new environments but
 it has
also
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 put
bad impact
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a bad impact
 on the work opportunities for the people.
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