People are spending more hours at work place in some countries what are the positive and negative impact of the trend?

World become more competitive because of the large number of talented people due to
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in some nations people are working for long hours to achieve high outcome. There are several benefits and drawback for
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on the one side, it helps to get high profit in their
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it can bring several
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problems among them. To embark on working for a long
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place makes an employee bring into an incompetent condition in
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both mental and physical. Eight hours per day is an appropriate
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permit in a
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a place where work is done
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more than that leads to create mental and physical issues. Long
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works leads to stress due to
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it affects the mental
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like depression rather than
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sitting for too long every day increase the risk of heart attack or stroke and long workday can interrupt your sleep and
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cause to employees' performance level.
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a study of the world
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organisation reveals that the employees who working long
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would admitted to the significant diseases like depression, tiredness, fatigue and lack of attendance. There is another school of thought that it is essential for spending more
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to compete with the economic world. Now a days is more developed and there is large number competitive in each field of
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economy only accept the best from all the areas. So company wants to more product able for
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employee need to more productive for the future they need to
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looking for the future rather than the past.
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it would bring consequences rather than the advantage. Conclusively long
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in office destroys one's
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by mentally
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physically. It is happened that the government should take
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bound decision for
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