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Some feel that it is a waste of time to plan for the future and it is more important to focus on the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#feel #waste #time #plan #future #focus
Planning is really essential in
life
.
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.
It is impossible to
complete any without
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complete without any
 planning
.
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It is said by some individuals that it is important to make plans about
future
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the future
 because it will make
life
 smooth
,
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,
While others believe that people should concentrate more on
present
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the present
 rather than thinking about
future
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the future
. In my perspective, people should make plans about
future but
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the future, but
the future but
 they should not ignore their presents and my viewpoints will be elaborated in the aforementioned paragraphs.
To begin
 with, it is well said by someone that if
future
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the future
 is planned well
then
 people could have
better
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a better life
better lives
life
 because planning makes everything organized and there is less possibility of mistakes if all tasks are planned and everything will be structured.
For instance
, If in a school curriculum and teaching should not be
planned
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planned, then
then
 teachers would not be able to deliver lectures and students can not give exams so every organization
plans
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plan
 for completing their work efficiently.
On the other hand
, some people are involved too much in the planning of
future
 that they
can not
can not
cannot
 concentrate on their
present which
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present, which
 can ruin their present and they are unable to enjoy their
life
 because they spend most of their time about thinking of
present
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the present
.
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People should focus on their present and they should try to efforts to improve it. To recapitulate, I would like to write that people should plan about
future but
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the future, but
the future but
 they should not entirely focus on
future
bacause
a written work or composition that has been published (printed on pages bound together)
books
future
 and past are linked.So they should make balance about the planning of past and
future
.
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