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The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease the violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The society in which we are living has
growing
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grown
 trend to watch movies and television programs. People seek enjoyment and relaxation by observing electronic media. In my opinion,
Government
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the government
the Government
 should check the level of violence in movies and other electronic media programs because every scene puts some imprints in the brain. These pictures stay in memories and give impact on personality. Violence has multiple impacts on human psychology. Kids choose to get guns and pistols in the form of toys after watching violence on
media screen
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screen media
. Some young boys seek pleasure by copying
this
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 sort of crimes in real life being impressed by their heroes. Middle aged ladies become frightened while thinking of their family members living in
this
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 society
that is
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 having an unusual show of violent episodes. Old guys become depressed after observing brutal clips on the cinema screen.
On the other hand
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, some portion of viewers has a propensity to enjoy and
relaxation
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relax
 after seeing episodes of
thrill
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thrillers
 and war. Clips without violence are not palatable to them. The majority of these people are mature enough, they don’t copy
this
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 stuff in their real life. They watch the movies, make their brain relaxed and
then
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 forget the events. In short,
Government
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the Government
 should make strict policy to control the activity of media. Violent episodes may be
there but
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there, but
 only for the sake of the thrill. The lesson of the story should be very constructive and informative.
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