Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination. Others believe that money and appearance are more important. Discuss both view and give your own opinion?

In the world today, essential factors that

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affect

achievements of people has become a topic of debate. While there is a common belief that having a sound financial base and an attractive

appearance

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is a crucial reason, I am of the opinion that diligence and persistence

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are

of paramount importance. On the one hand, owning a great deal of money and an impressive

appearance

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, in view of a large number of people, may secure successful career.

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, an affluent family can be considered as a strong foundation that assists people in attaining accomplishment.

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is because those who come from families with

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a sound financial base

usually receive

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usually receiving

better education, which provides them better preparation to build their own future career.

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, it is undeniable that

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appearance

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appears

, to some extent, influences the chance to get a job, especially in several specific sectors

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as entertainment or fashion.

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, apart from experience and competence, the way a candidate dress in an interview may decide whether he is accepted or not.

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, I would argue that hard work and persistence play a pivotal role in the journey to achieving success in life. One significant reason is that not everyone is fortunate enough to be born

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wealthy parents or to have an impressive

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that can draw the attention of surrounding people.

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, in order to reach the peak of their career, people may have to work industriously. One of the excellent examples to

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is the inspiring story of Nguyen Ngoc Ki, a well-known teacher in Vietnam, he was born with handicapped

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arms, but

as a studious child, he tried to learn to write by his

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foot, and finally

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made his dream to

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made his dream

become a teacher came true. Another reason is that success seldom comes without difficulties which require people to put enormous effort into overcoming the hard time. In these cases,

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the determination

a determination

may become a crucial motivation that keeps people moving forward until they reach their long-term goals. In conclusion, albeit material wealth and attractive

appearance

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may attribute to the successful careers of a large number of people, I would claim that accomplishment will come if people are always diligent and persistent.