Societies would benefit from a ban on all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purpose, and can even be damaging. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people have different views about whether a complete prohibition of all categories of advertising would bring benefits to societies or not. While I accept that advertisements are useless and can even cause some damage, I
disagree
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disagree with this point
this
point of view. On the one hand, the reason why I accept
this
view is impulsive purchase. Obviously, because of the growing popularity of advertisements, consumers are easily swayed when making decisions to buy items.
This
is because the claims made in advertisements seem to misrepresent unreal benefit of a
products
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product
or be exaggerated and distorted to overshadow the true functions, qualities and values of commodities.
Therefore
, advertising encourages people to purchase things they do not really need or even fake products.
For example
, in Viet Nam, due to marketing and advertising campaigns, a large amount of people is reliant on functional food
instead
of consuming nutritional food
such
as meat, vegetables, fruits.
On the other hand
, I believe that a comprehensive restriction of
this
industry can cause the high level of unemployment. These
day
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days
, our life is inundated with various
form
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forms
of advertising
such
as TV commercials, emails, which can bridge the gap between customers and manufactures because information about products would be disseminated to reach more customers.
Therefore
, advertising can help them boost their sales figures and
then
production and commerce can be promoted, which dispenses thousands of employment opportunities for many people.
This
means that If adverts are forbidden, a number of
worker
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workers
such
as marketers, would face unemployment. In conclusion, while a total ban on advertisements can have
positive impact
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a positive impact
on societies, I
also
believe that
this
can cause some negative effects on people’s lives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer choice
  • informed decisions
  • economic growth
  • job losses
  • innovation
  • competition
  • public awareness campaigns
  • perpetuate stereotypes
  • unrealistic expectations
  • unhealthy lifestyles
  • targeted digital advertising
  • consumer privacy
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