Schools should be accountable for poor achievements of students. How far do you agree with this opinion?
It is a common thought that schools are responsible for
poor performance
of students. While Suggestion
the poor performance
i
agree that students have poor achievements due to refers to the speaker or writer
I
schools
, Suggestion
school
i
would refers to the speaker or writer
I
also
believe that students have to be responsible for their academic result
.
On the one hand, it is understandable why some people think that schools should be accountable for poor accomplishments of students. One reason is that, the school curriculum is not attractive enough to make students concentrate on lessons in class. This
leads to student’s laziness and discouragement. It means that they would not pay much attention to lessons and do not have enough knowledge to complete their examinations well
. Another reason is that teaching method has an important role to play in the academic Suggestion
examinations as well
result
of students. Whether students is focused
or not, it depends on the ways teachers convey lessons for them. Suggestion
are focused
For example
, if a teacher do not teach
students by enthusiastic and thoughtful way, students would know nothing about lessons, and they would fall behind with their studies and have a poor Suggestion
does not teach
achievements
.
Suggestion
achievement
On the other hand
, i
would maintain that students are the main reasons why they have poor accomplishments. It is recognised that there are many entertainment equipments for students refers to the speaker or writer
I
such
as Smartphones, Laptops. For this
reason, the majority of students tend to use devices with the Internet connection to play games or browse on social networks rather than learn, which makes them would no longer interested in studying in class and doing homeworks at home. As a
result
, school students could not keep up with the workload, and they might get poor learning results.
In conclusion, while it is true that schools are the reasons why students have poor achievements because of school curriculum and teaching methods, it is also
my belief that poor performance
of students is the Suggestion
the poor performance
result
of themselves.Submitted by Andy on
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