You are moving to a new city with your family. Write a letter to a real estate agent to enquire about accommodations. Include in your letter Why you are moving Where you want to live The type of accommodation required
Dear Sir/Madam
I am writing to inform you of my interest in accommodations. I am going on holiday next week. I would like to say that I am planning to come with my family to the USA, and I wish to stay in a new city near of sea .
I have heard about that new city recently . I consider that It is the place where we could spend our time with my wife and my children during our trip. There are a lot of interesting places for tourists especially I am interested in the fishing area.
It is important that we stay single home but it must have 3 bedrooms, two bathrooms and a large kitchen with all types of equipment. The most important that the house has a nice yard where will be colourful flowers, trees and corners for children. If you have that kind of home please book it for us for 8 nights since 8th June.
Yours faithfully
Zohrab
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Task Achievement
For task achievement, make sure your letter closely follows the given instructions. Your letter deviates from the original request about moving to a new city for residential reasons, focusing instead on a holiday accommodation. Provide detailed reasons for moving, specify the desired location within the city, and describe the type of accommodation needed based on the original task for a higher score.
Coherence & Cohesion
Develop your ideas more logically and clearly to enhance coherence. Introduce your purpose early in the letter and dedicate paragraphs to each requirement (reason for moving, desired location, and type of accommodation requested) for a clearer structure.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices to link sentences and paragraphs together more smoothly. Incorporating transition words like 'Furthermore,' 'Moreover,' and 'In addition' can make your letter flow better and be more cohesive.
Coherence & Cohesion
The greeting and closing of your letter are appropriate, but to elevate your score, personalize the greeting if possible (e.g., if you know the name of the real estate agent). Also, ensure your closing is consistently formal in tone to match the greeting.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
