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In many countries, people are concerned about the number of children who are overweight. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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In some countries, including the USA and Britain, a large number of children are overweight.
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 is due to a combination of poor diet and lack of exercise. Children tend to be attracted to food
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 high in sugar and fat,
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 as various forms of fast food. They
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 tend to be ignorant of what constitutes a healthy diet.
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 parents may try to guide their children, they cannot be present always.
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, children are influenced by other factors,
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 as advertising by fast-food companies. On top of that, children are much less active than they used to be. While in the past young people took part in activities that burned a considerable amount of energy, children today spend their time indoors, sitting at computers or playing video games. They have no opportunity to burn the calories they are taking in, leading to obesity. There are a number of steps that need to be taken to solve
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 problem. The
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 is to educate children about nutrition. Schools should organize compulsory lessons to explain the main elements of a healthy diet and teach the pupil how to prepare simple but healthy meals. The government should
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 place restrictions on the type of advertising allowed during children’s TV programs. Children
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 need to be encouraged to participate in sports. Again, schools have a large role to play in
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, by offering a wide range of outdoor activities. Investment in local sports clubs by the government would
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 help in alleviating the problem.
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