Successful sports professionals can earn a lot of more money than people in other important professions. Some people think that this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, in the professional sports games a lot of sportsmen earn a huge
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or get expensive gifts from sponsors.
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, while some people believe that paying a huge
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to athletes is increasing
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authority and present
country
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power in the world, I strongly agree with those who think these
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monies
moneys
need spend poor people and increase
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teachers, doctors. On the one hand, it could argue that paying huge fees to sportsmen who present
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in the Olympic games have been motivated them to achieve a
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higher
result in the competition time.
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and foremost, these results show the real
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power, power
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the country
countries
the world level and some people think is enemy starting afraid of them, so will not attack them in the future. Without these sport competitions, we would not be able to show them our power.
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, some
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argued that athletes spend a lot of time and power to prepare these games
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as Olympus or the World championship.
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,
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and sponsors have to compensate them in their efforts.
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, I side with those who think that paying a huge
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to the sportsmen does not make any sense as
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government
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the government
has concentrated more for improving to the social status of poor people. Unfortunately, in the world a large amount of people who need to be aided in buy food or clothes and a number of these people grow every day. In fact,
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government
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the government
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gives
expensive gifts or
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to the Olympic sportsmen which spends
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money
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to luxury life.
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,
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has to spend
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money
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to the social sectors
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as increase
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of teachers and doctors. These professions give more benefit to our society than athletes in the Olympic game. Without these people working whole their lives, we will not be able to treat illness or educate children in the schools and universities. In conclusion,
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sportsmen present our
country
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in the famous sports games,
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needs to concentrate more to social sectors and support poor people.
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, on balance, I believe support people who educate us or treat illness more important than sportsmen.
Submitted by Amr Elkady on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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