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Many students choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time?

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In
this
 modern era, a number of pupils are deciding to get a break before starting university to explore multifarious places as well as obtain a knowledge about the work by doing a job. I think it is a great idea for getting one year gap to them.
Also
, I will discuss my point of views with examples in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, students decide to take a break after finishing the secondary education as they want to explore various kinds of tourist attractions.
For instance
, students get study burden during the school days and they do not have time to travel during those days, so they consider that the best time to get a break from study is before getting admission to the academy.
Moreover
, it has been estimated that 70% youngsters love to travel to different places to gain knowledge about cultures and historical places.
However
, some students opt to work before choosing higher education as they want to get an experience in the same field, they are going to study but an another reason for
this
 is poverty.
For example
, many students come from poor families and after schooling they want to initiate their life independently.
In addition
, they know their family background so they commence a new job to earn money for the university fees.
Also
, doing a job in any field has many positive sides, which become a student more mature before attending an educational institution. Coming to an outcome, it is a brilliant way to get to know about our World during our one year break and pupil become more mature to adapt a university environment.
Also
, youngsters spend quality of time with their families and travel together, which is an imperative in
this
 hectic life as some students migrate to different countries to accomplish their higher education.
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