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In some countries, the government pays unemployed people on a weekly basis. How does this impact individuals and the government? Do you agree or disagree with this idea?

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To support their citizens, some countries` governments established social programs for unemployed people. Once
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 helps a lot in short terms for some persons,
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however in
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however, in
 the long-term
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 may cause lower self-responsibility and motivation for self-development. I personally agree with the positive impact of
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 an initiative, but it
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 has some downsides. I agree with
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 idea because it supports the essential needs of citizens.
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 way both sides, the government and the unemployed, receive a positive impact with high social points for the government and covers a basic level of life for the people. With weekly, short period support, people become available to concentrate on a job search and the application process.
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, the government looks positive in the eyes of their electorate by providing unemployed people with extra funds.
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, simply supporting people who are struggling for money may cause them to be more relaxed and unmotivated.
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, the employment department should provide some kind of tools to help people change their situation. I definitely support
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 social initiatives and would vote with both hands for it. In any case, I agree that it has a positive impact for everyone.
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Also there
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 is all the time a space for improvements, so a feedback research and results overview should be applied on
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 minimum valuable income project established by governments in different countries.

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