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Some people think that health care should be free for everyone. Others think that people should pay for their medical costs themselves. Discuss both the views with your own opinion.

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Health
treatment
 cost is increasing considerably day by day. Some people suggest medical
treatment
 should be free of cost, others assert cost should be paid by a person.
This
 essay will delve into both vantage points, and
subsequently
, will explore my own perspective in turns. Exponents of the free
treatment support
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treatment, support
 their statement with multiple reasons.
Firstly
, some people lack proper
treatment
 due to heavy bills. To explain in detail, due to the technological development diagnosing a problem has become distinctly easy, but
this
 caused an increase in the number of tests,
consequently
, more amount patient need to pay.
Thus
, some poor people don't go for early diagnostic tests. The other contributing factor is facilities in the
government
 hospitals. These hospitals lack good doctors and infrastructure. Usually, the
government
 hospitals are cheaper than the private hospitals,
as a result
 a person with low income prefers to go to the
government
 hospital, but due to the bad conditions, he prefers the private hospitals and
finally
 due to the huge price he lacks the proper
treatment
.
Thus everyone
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Thus, everyone
 can get proper medical help with free checkups and
treatment
.
However
, there are many disadvantages attached to the free
treatment
.
Firstly
, the
government
 need to invest a lot money into it. To elaborate
further
, to build a hospital with all modern equipments is costly. As a consequence, the
government
 need to spend enormous money.
Nevertheless
, due to the free
treatment
 no earnings will be there, which will add an extra burden of maintenance. So, some people postulate, the
government
 should charge for the treatments. In conclusion, free
treatment
 cause several benefits and its benefits outweigh the disadvantages attached to the free
treatment
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal healthcare
  • affordability
  • equal access
  • public funding
  • financial burden
  • quality of care
  • sustainable
  • incentive
  • personal responsibility
  • preventive care
  • medical emergencies
  • health insurance
  • income disparities
  • social welfare
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