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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #choices
Choices in life have always been a controversial topic. Some people believe that there are so many options nowadays. In my opinion, I partly agree with
this
 statement for the following reasons. It is undeniable that with the development of science and technology, people’s life is becoming more and more
convienient
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
 with the
availibility
the quality of being at hand when needed
availability
 of selections for necessities and facilities.
For example
, there
is
Suggestion
are
 now a variety of ways to keep in touch with friends or family via smart phones,
facetiming
 or social media.
Moreover
, students all around the world
also
 have more choices in choosing which school in which country to attend; which kind of courses they they want to register – online or offline
…
Accept space
…
Other than that, people
also
 feel free to find a partner they want to marry without having to obey
parents’arrangement
 like Vietnamese used to endure in feudality.
However
, a lot of people out there are trying to live their life on a daily basis and have no option to make. For the people living in the country where war still occurs, their only choice is to survive and to protect their families. These people cannot choose where they were born so that attempting is the only selection they have.
In addition
, North Koreans are now living like close books. They are not allowed to use
Internet
Suggestion
the Internet
 or watch a movie because of the strict law legislated by the government. For all these above mentioned, it is true to say that people nowadays are equipped with so many choices to make whereas there are many particular cases in the world where choices are not available for people to make.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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