Many people today find that the cost of attaining a University-level education is extremely high for the students and their families. What are the causes of this situation, and how can governments, Universities and the students themselves overcome the problem?

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the expense involved
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appear to be possible. Perhaps the major factor
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here is the reduction
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for University
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. For instance, in the UK,
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courses
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were virtually
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free to the student
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but now
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around £30,000 per year.
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pattern appears to be global, with
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the result
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and their families need to meet the costs directly. Another
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of living in many countries, meaning that the
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life(
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to fees) can be almost overwhelming for
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. A third factor is the difficulty in finding part-time work
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a student is studying.
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work tends to be poorly paid,
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time that
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possible solutions
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restore some element
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state funding
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public budgets are under
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pressure these
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we took
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step it would greatly enhance access to
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for people on lower incomes. A second remedy might
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be for
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the Universities to offer shorter
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, or more
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with an element of professionally paid work
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experience included
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courses
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were more available, it would
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reduce the issue
of living expenses to
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some extent
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,
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themselves should perhaps be
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more flexible in
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attitude to
education, and consider attending University at a later stage, or possibly only when they have accumulated sufficient funds to support themselves. In summary,
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the factors
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of living appear to
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be the
main causes. A coordinated response by
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the state
,
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the institutions
institutions
and
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the individuals
individuals
may well lessen
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the severity
of
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the situation
.
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