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Many people work long hours,leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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In recent years
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the majority of the people are spending more
time
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 on their
workplace leaving
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workplace, leaving
 little
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 for relaxation and other extracurricular activities.
This
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One of the significant
advantage
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advantages
 that encourage people to spend more
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 in office is due to career progression.The reason for
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 is getting the financial rewards and job prospects
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 if they excel in their job during performance appraisal or review.
For example
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the pay increments and promotion are crucial for a family man to satisfy their family needs.
Furthermore
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every
individiual
a human being
individual
 expects to be financially stable because of the weak economy of the current era.
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to lead a luxurious life they are giving more importance to
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 and less priority to other recreational activities.
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there are certainly some drawbacks which produce negative impact on an individual's physical and mental health.Since many people follow a sedentary
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
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so
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 in turn counter many health problems
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 as obesity and eye strain for people who does compute related
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 which may
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lead
 to loss vision on
long run
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long runs
a long run
the long run
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the
physchological
mental or emotional as opposed to physical in nature
psychological
physiological
 effects
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include
 addiction to
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 and later on it makes them workaholic.After facing pressure in the workplace, with that negative
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feeling
 returning home it creates conflicts in relations for not spending quality
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 with the family. In conclusion
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the number of issues
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 more compared to the benefits
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staying fit and healthy is vital for a human being.
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Even though
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staying late in
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 increase the chance of promotion
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we are losing our health for that.I agree that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages in
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 way of leading the life.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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