Many people think technological devices such as smart phones, tablets and mobile phones bring more disadvantages than advanatages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The relevance of the electronic gadgets like mobile phones and tablets is alarmingly on the surge. Some are of the opinion that, it brings more demerits rather than its merits.
Nevertheless
, I disagree with
this
statement because of numerous reasons which are going to discuss in
this
essay.
To begin
with, there are so many benefits that can be gained from using an electronic device.
Firstly
, it moves freely,
therefore
we can keep it wherever we need to go. Which means people bring it,
this
for official purposes, parties and
also
to holy places.
Secondly
, it provides various features like communication, shopping, paying bills and
also
for educational purposes. So which means uncountable benefits is imparted from an electronic device.
Therefore paying
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Therefore, paying
bills through online
also
reduce time consuming for peoples and
also
we can communicate with people wherever in the world while we can buy any product which is on the earth.
For instance
, we can select and buy an American product when sitting at our home in India. So through the devices we get multi various benefits which are unavoidable in our day to day life.
On the other hand
, some people advocate that over executive of electronic gadgets make bad effects in people which is mainly on health issues
for example
a study in research reveals that there is link between the brain tumour with over executive of gadgets
moreover
these devices treat some security issues in a nation which means its grabbing some personal details of citizen in a country.
For example
, recently India prohibited several softwares available in smart phones due to the lack of security. So that over executive would create some sort of demerits in society. Conclusively there are plenty of upsides belongs to the administration of technological gadgets which we cannot avoid.
However there
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However, there
are some negative impacts
also
it is hoped that the Government should take steps to remove the dark side of technology.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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