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some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. others beleive they should be free to work in another country if they wish. discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country #beleive
The discussion on whether highly expert
people
 should serve the
nation
 where they were trained or they should migrate to another
country
 as they want is a controversial one. Some
people
 opine that
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 professionals should practice where they get their training,
whereas
 other
people
aruge
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argue
 that
experts
 should choose where they want to
work
. In my opinion, everyone
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their
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rights
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 to choose where they want to
persue
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pursue
 their career but at the same
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 they have some
responsibilites
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responsibilities
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the mankind. On the one hand, there are some plausible reasons
for
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why
experts
 should be free to
work
 in any
country
. It requires quite a few years of studies and training to
beccome
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become
 a professional in any
fields
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such
 as doctors or engineers.
People
work
 hard to obtain that achievement and most of the
time
 it requires lots of investment
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the
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training and study.
For example
, most of the
time
 doctors go abroad to finish their MBBS degree or higher degrees which demands a significant amount of money to
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.
Moreover
, sometimes families have to go through a tough
time
 to provide for the person who is getting trained for
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 future job.
As a result
,
proffesionals
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professionals
 want to earn more to return the favour to the family and
also
sometime
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 the
country
 they were trained
will
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be
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 hard to provide a job as they
desired
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, which is why
people
 like to migrate
another
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country
 for good opportunities.
On the other hand
,
experts
 should serve the
country
 where they get their training for some important reasons.
For example
,
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professionals
 have some
resposibilities
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responsibilities
 toward the
people
 and the
country
 which assist them
to
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be
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 an expert in their field. If all
experts
 leave the
country
 there will be no one to help the
people
 and it will hamper the
nation
.
Moreover
, by working in the same
country
,
proffesionals
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professionals
 will encourage the young
people
 to follow the same and serve the
nation
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betterment of the
country
. to recapitulate,
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 believe that
proffesionals
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professionals
 can choose any
country
 to practice in their field but they should remember the
country
 where they had their training and
work
 for it in any way that can aid in the amelioration of the
nation
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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