Do you feel like anything is missing from your life? How would your life be if you had it?

My life is not perfect, it doesn't have everything everyone wants, but it doesn't feel too deprived either. But what I find myself most lacking is confidence in my own abilities. Since starting school until now, I have been quite shy, and rarely take the initiative with anything, even though I like it.
For example
, when I
first
entered 6th grade, the teacher asked who was confident to be the monitor.
Although
I really wanted to, I sat still, stiff and embarrassed if I stood up to volunteer. Or another time in 10th grade, when I was changing classes, everything was still very new, new friends, new class, I could just sit still, look at all of you guys who were talking and getting acquainted. It wasn't until half a year that I really got to know all of my classmates and was able to talk freely. I found myself being shy like that was really inconvenient and made me lose good opportunities. So I read books about how to speak like How to win friends and Influence People and Master the art of communication and the world is your oyster, trying to be more open, motivating myself to talk to others, even just a few simple sentences. And the results came not long after that, I actively joined the school's STEM club, joined online courses and received praise, and
then
I confidently nominated to be the head of the STEM club and become one of the members of the music club executive committee. I am very happy that I have changed in a good way, so I can meet many new friends, learn from excellent brothers and sisters in the school, actively build, determine directions for the future after that.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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