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Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. To what extent do you agree/disagree?

#students #exams #skills
Some convinced that students should learn academic
knowledge
 to take their exams and ignore some subjects
such
 as dressing or cooking.
On the contrary
, I believe that it is necessary for them to learn useful courses either how to cook or how to make clothes. There are various reasons why people might argue that students only focus on learning academic subjects. These courses are regarded as core subjects at school that provide
knowledge
 about history, geography, literature, mathematic. When students absorb
these
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this knowledge
knowledge
 they will have completely
understanding
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understood
 about life and social.
Additionally
, it is thought that occupation related to thinking will get high-pay salary and work in
great environment
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a great environment
, so parents tend to want their children have a better occupation in the future that related to academic subjects.
On the other hand
, some courses like cooking or dressing are
also
 important. Without cooking courses, children could not have
chance
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a chance
the chance
 to know how to cook and
then
 they do not have
ability
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the ability
 to live independently. They could make much money to have meals at luxury
restaurants but
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restaurants, but
 they are not able to cook any special meals for their friends or family.
Moreover
, it is more beneficial for students to learn dressing courses because they can easily apply
for
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to
 their life in some way like saw clothes or design some shirts.
Thus
, soft skills are pivotal in children’s
leaning
the cognitive process of acquiring skill or knowledge
learning
. In conclusion, with
learning academic
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learning, academic
knowledge
 students and necessary skills children will have the opportunities to develop and achieve
greatly
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greater
great
greatest
 success in life.
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