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The advances in air travel are focused only in the first class and this seems to have left others with no benefits at all? Do you agree or dissgree?

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In
this
 modern era, world is changing a lot as compared to the past. Due to
this
 reason mostly can easily go anywhere in less time and airlines are the fastest way of transportation. But in
airplane
 services
are depends
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depending
depend
 on the
travel
class
 ticket. In the following paragraphs, I have some strong arguments to support my view. Commencing with, in each and every business top costumer are always
gets
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getting
bets
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bet
 options. Airlines are following
same strategy
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the same strategy
. They are providing
exacellent
very good;of the highest quality
excellent
 services to the
passangers
a traveler riding in a vehicle (a boat or bus or car or plane or train etc) who is not operating it
passengers
passenger
 who are travelling in the
first
class
. Because they are spending almost double or more than that rather than the others for the same destination. Even in any emergency situation
airhostess
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air hostess
 always
first
 preference to the A
class
 costumers. As per the 2017 government report, airline's 20
percentages
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percentage
 income only comes from the people who buy top
class
 tickets. Mainly special row
also
 created by the
airlins
a hose that carries air under pressure
airlines
airline's
airline
 for the people who
preffer
like better; value more highly
prefer
 to
travel
 in
first
class
.
However
, some people
thinks
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think
 that,
passangers
a traveler riding in a vehicle (a boat or bus or car or plane or train etc) who is not operating it
passengers
 who are
travel
Suggestion
travelling
 in regular tickets, they are not getting any benefits. But is is 100 percentage fake.
Firstly
, they are
also
 getting almost all services which are for expensive
class
 people. But the difference is in priority.
Furthermore
, these points clarify the darkest side of the flights. To conclude, we must have to accept that services are based on
travel
class
in
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on
 flights. But
someties
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
peope
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
clims
assert or affirm strongly; state to be true or existing
claim
climes
claims
 that there
is
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are
 zero benefits for the normal
class
travelar
a person who changes location
traveller
travellers
 and I
have fully disagree
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have fully disagreed
 with it.
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