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In some countries, the government pays unemployed people on a weekly basis. How does this impact individuals and the government? Do you agree or disagree with this idea?

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To support their citizens, some countries established social programs for unemployed people. It helps a lot in the short term for some people,
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however in
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however, in
 the long term
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 may cause less responsibility and motivation for self development. I personally agree with the positive impact of
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 an initiative, but it
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 has some downsides.
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, I agree with
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 idea because it supports the essential needs of citizens.
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 way both sides, the government and the unemployed, receive a positive impact. The government receives high social points and the people receive a basic level of life via
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 minimum viable income project. With weekly, short period support, people become available to concentrate on searching for a job and the job application process.
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, the government looks positive in the eyes of their electorate by providing unemployed people with extra funds.
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, simply supporting people who are struggling for money may cause them to be more relaxed and unmotivated.
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, the employment department should provide some kind of tools to help people change their situation.
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, organize self-development courses and job fairs for people. At the same time, any social program should receive KPIs to monitor the success for unemployed people. So, some report from the final receivers of
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 funding should be collected regarding how that money was used. In any case, I agree that it has a positive impact for everyone.
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, I definitely support
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 social initiatives and would vote with both hands for them. For sure,
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 kind of project is beneficial for either side and should be supported and monitored.
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, I agree that a minimum viable income project is an amazing initiative.

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