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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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Young people are the
future
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 hope, every nation believes, they can build a country which could be self sufficient in each and every aspect. As an introduction, why some of the countries encourage students to work? , abide by the law. The reason behind
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 idea is to make them responsible, gather some experience, which would be definitely helpful in their
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 and foremost, students study on their parents support, economically as well as morally. After finishing their schooling, it is considered by some of the countries, to practice them on socialization, make them self satisfaction & motivational. To achieve
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, the students should leave their parents and handle their lifestyle alone, which provides them the self confidence. As an example, Singapore is aboriginal, students should serve in the military for one year, at least to complete their graduation.
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, it would help the parents to choose the right path for their children and highly possible to guide them for a better
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, an youngster could be talented in drawing and a free period, could help him to focus on his interests and
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, some youths are really interested in exploring the world, which helps to alleviate, studies would be a barrier and after complete schooling, a year for work or travel helps them to achieve their wish, which
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 helps to shape the
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 and it should be acclaimed. On the flip side, it would create burdens on the students, at
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 as addiction of the drugs. As a conclusion, I would assert, that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages and it would really help the youngsters to have a gap after the long period of studies, a breadth of space to fulfil their wish and back to their study cascade, will help to shape the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gap year
  • Real-world experience
  • Soft skills
  • Independence
  • Maturity
  • Cultural understanding
  • Career path
  • Dropout rates
  • Financial cushion
  • Student loans
  • Academic momentum
  • Peer pressure
  • Isolation
  • Inactivity
  • Future prospects
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