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Many people nowadays are worried about the quality of the food they buy. What are some of these problems? Can the problem be reduced by governments or individuals?

In the contemporary state of our society, the
quality
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 of the
food
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 that people purchase has been an issue of concern, as it negatively affects the
health
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 of those consumers, leading to severe
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 issues
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 as obesity,
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 poisoning, or cancers.
This
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 essay will delve into some of these problems, along with feasible solutions. There
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 a variety of problems that the
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 of
food
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 has created, causing people’s concern about the
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 they buy. The
first
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 problem to be mentioned is the increasing use of processed and fast
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. Since these products are undoubtedly low in nutrients and high in the amount of salt, sugar, trans fat, and calories, they are notorious for their contribution to diabetes, obesity, and cardiovascular diseases. Another problem leading to people’s worries is the use of prohibited chemicals in
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, as some merchants are not
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hesitating
 to use them to capitalize on the profit.
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, in Vietnam, there are lots of small traders who soaked their fruits in carcinogens before selling to beautify the appearances of the fruits, causing people’s concern about
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quality
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. Fortunately, there are some possible solutions to tackle these problems. The government’s regulatory roles should be demonstrated in raising people’s awareness through
subsidy educational
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subsidy, educational
 campaigns or to impose higher taxes on processed and fast
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 businesses, as it would
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 people to consume these products.
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, policies should be implemented to punish and deter those who sold contaminated
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 with high fines and even imprisonment. As individuals, knowledge enrichment is required to have the right
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 choice, which is safe and healthy to consume while
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 avoid risking to damage our
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 by eating
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guaranteed
food
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. In conclusion, poor
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quality
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 is posing a threat to people’s
health
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, but efforts could be made to mitigate the consequences. If the authority takes their shot, along with individuals’ involvement, hopefully, people will not suffer from the problems arising from poor
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quality
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 in the future.

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