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people say that instead of we seeing the internet as a means of creating diverse communication possibilities worldwide, we should be concerned on the effect it is having on our social interactions. Do you agree or disagree to this view?

#people #internet #communication #possibilities #effect #interactions
Truly people say that
instead
 of us seeing the
internet
 as a means of creating diverse
communication
 possibilities worldwide, we should be concerned about the effect it is having on our social interactions which I totally agree too. One of the reasons I agree with
this
 view is because people now spend more time on the
internet
 doing what doesn'
t
 benefit them.
For instance
, watching videos of immoral activities, as the time being spent watching these videos could be spent on building good
communication
 skills with people around.
Moreover
, people are now resorting to the
internet
 to do things that could be done in person or be done by people around them.
Furthermore
, the
internet
 has helped people to lessen their interactions with people, which doesn'
t
 help in building their people skills, good
communication
 skills, leadership skills and all other skills needed for good social interaction.
For instance
, I prefer using the
internet
 (WhatsApp to be precise) to message my friend or roommate
that is
 around me for something I need all because I probably don'
t
 want to get up from where am sitting or I don'
t
 actually feel like talking.
However
, the
internet
 has truly created ways of communicating worldwide through ( Skype, Facebook, WhatsApp, Twitter, Instagram, Zoom, Email, and all other social medias) so you don'
t
 have to travel far or take a lot of time to send a letter to someone in another country or journey down to deliver goods and services to a person but
this
 same
internet
 has so much limited physical and social interactions between people. In conclusion, the
internet
 does not help to build one's people skills,
communication
 skills and other necessary skills needed to have a good, proper and sound social interaction with people.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • global connections
  • face-to-face interaction
  • social isolation
  • mental health
  • diverse communication
  • social skills
  • virtual and physical interactions
  • relationship maintenance
  • online communication
  • in-person interaction
  • meaningful connections
  • social media platforms
  • forums and chat apps
  • balance
  • overuse
  • shallow interactions
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