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The best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, it is impossible to deny that the environmental issues are increasing day by day in the world. There could be several reasons behind it, I do not agree with the statement to increase the cost of fuel,
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 is only one solution, but there should be other implementations by state and step ahead with better solutions. On the one hand, as the population is increasing, demand for property increases,
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 leads to reduction in forests or green areas, increase in private transport is alarming
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 the main cause of air pollution. The four-wheeler is affordable, easily available in instalments and it is economical. Rise in the petrol charges will not help the environment, but will be heavy on the middle class people’s pocket.
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 of that, the government should impose heavy taxes on the vehicles and discourage the demand.
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, the state can run the campaigns to promote the plantation.
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, Pakistan taught kids in the school about plantation and provides them seeds in the pencil, and the forest department of various parts of Pakistan plants the millions of trees in the uprooted forests of northern areas. Apart from
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 introduce the Hi-Octane fuel, which is 99% purified and promote electric cars, ease them on taxes, extra government charges to keep the environment clean and green. In the end, the possible solution to tackle environmental problems is not the increase of the fuel charges, but to teach the importance of plants and give the chances to the electric vehicles.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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