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The internet has informed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the Internet? What are the best ways to solve them?

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These days, the Internet is increasingly developing and it has
also
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 changed the way
information
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 is spread and used.
However
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, it has unwittingly given rise to some issues that did not happen in the past.
This
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 essay will discuss the problems and suggest some solution to address these ones.
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 with, there are several issues that are
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caused
 by the Internet.
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, some individuals spread inaccurate
information
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 about politics on many
websites
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 and social
networks
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network
 sites
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 as sharing distorted
information
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 about the Vietnamese state officials, which may make the citizens lose trust in the government. The
second
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 matter is the rapidly growing appearance of dangerous
websites
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. These
websites
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 vulgarize sensitive images and videos which impact the Internet users negatively, especially the children.
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, they can easily get into risky mental health problems
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 as stress, depression, confusion and obsession.
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, there are some feasible ways the authorities can adapt to solve these problems.
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 of all, they can impose administrative fines for sharing misinformation and prison sentences for providing
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state
 secrets or reactionary
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, which will act as a deterrent for those having similar intention.
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, telecommunication companies should be required to block all black
websites
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 through passing a law of internet use. To illustrate, telecom giants
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 as Viettel, FPT,… can prevent their users who are under 18 from getting access to these
websites
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. By way of conclusion, albeit the Internet’s development has led to some hazardous issues
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 as posting misinformation, users browsing banned webs, the government can solve them by employing mentioned measures which are imposing heavy fines and introducing stringent regulation regarding the use of the Internet.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cybersecurity
  • phishing
  • identity theft
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • social isolation
  • internet addiction
  • data privacy
  • digital literacy
  • regulations
  • awareness programs
  • manipulate
  • proliferation
  • consent
  • escalated
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