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Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people and there is little can be done to rectify this.

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It is undeniable fact that the media influences our lifestyle and our opinions. There is a common belief that media conglomerates who
control
 worldwide mass media sources
also
control
 our minds, decisions and there is a little chance to make any changes. It is agreed that it is very hard to diminish our reliance from media resources and their negative effect on us as every
society
 needs some sources of
information
 in order to acquire
information
 they need.
Moreover most
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Moreover, most
 of media sources of the world are under government
control
 which are mainly being used to
control
 its citizens. Every member of
society
 needs to get an
information
. Without
information
 it would not be possible to involve in social, cultural and economic activities.
For example
, in order to trade successfully companies should be aware of the situation in the global market, or people should be provided with a social, cultural and political
information
 in order to know what is happening around. From
this
 aspect it is clear that for people it is very hard and nearly impossible to ignore media sources as our
society
 heavily depends on the
information
. Most of media sources,
however
 controlled by persons or groups who use the media mainly to
control
 the mass. Seemingly,
this
 process appears to be well disguised as most people aren't aware of the problem.
For instance
, some negative
information
 about certain person spread by all media sources changes the attitude of
society
 towards that person immediately, no matter who that person is. In conclusion, it
is very hard to change people's reliance from media sources as
Suggestion
depends very hard to change people's reliance from media sources as society dependssociety
society
 dependssociety depends on
information
 and would seek an
information
 in any circumstances.
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